In
the midst of crowd, people form a large space of line, giving enough space for
noble Temenggung Gelor to walk through this crowd. As he walks, the servants
behind him comes through, fanning him and bringing gifts for the sultan whom he
will met.
He
is a man who is well known for his status and power. But I can’t understand
this one thing. I know mother forbid me to speak during this time, but my
curiosity can’t hold on any longer.
“Mother…”
ask me while I’m holding my mother’s hand. “That man is my father right? Then
why aren’t we wearing fine clothes like him? Why aren’t we living like him?”
And
people look at us with surprised. The sight that the people made horrified me
and my mother run as fast as she can while carrying me.
At
that time, I have learned that my mother is a mistress to that Temenggung
Gelor.
Years
later, my mother has died, the people are coming to help for preparing for her
burial, and I am sitting beside her, grieving for her death.
“Is
she died?” ask the man who come to visit my mother. It was Temenggung Gelor who
comes. He must have come to see my mother and take me to live with him!
And
he enters the house and look at my dead mother. His face doesn’t show much
reaction. And then he looks at me and asks, “Are you my son?”
“Yes!”
I shout at him happily. He has taken notice of me!
“I
see, luckily I am in need of another slave,” said him with a glad face.
“What?”
ask me, surprised with his word.
“Right
now I need a slave to take care of my son who is currently 5 years old, and
since you’re 5 years older than him, I’m sure you can take care of him and be
friends with him.”
I
am in disbelief for what he has said. There must be some mistake here. “Bu-but
I’m your son, why do I have to take care of him…?”
“Of
course you are my son, but you are also a son of my slave. Therefore, you are
my slave. You have to take care of him because he is the son of my legal wife,
who is the descendant of the Bendahari.”
The
shock hurt my heart. I can’t believe the words that I have heard.
And
then he patted my back. “Thank goodness I met you. If I hadn’t, you might be
sold to the mercenaries or become a strayed child who lives on the street.”
I
just become silent. I can’t utter any word as I am in very shock. I don’t know
whether I should be mad at him for treating me like a slave or crying for being
born as a slave.
“Now
come, you have to meet your little brother. He is a nice child, I’m sure you
can take care of him.”
…………………………………………………………………………………………………
“Yop!”
shout Megat Damai. He is running toward me as fast as he can. “Wait for me!!”
“Yes,
Megat Damai.” And I stand still for him. “I’m not going anywhere.”
And
then he catches up to me. “(haa..) (haa…)” now he’s trying to catch up his
breath, trying to talk to me.
“Today
(gasp), is the day old man Penglipur Lara (storyteller) Lela will tell story
right?” said him after he can take his breath.
“Yes,
and I need to help him today.”
“Then
I want to go too!! I want to listen to his story today!!”
“No,
Megat Damai, you have to go the palace and study with the other princes.”
“Aww,
come on, those princes are not friendly, I’m tired with being friendly with
them!”
And
I continue on persuade him to go study “But Megat Damai, study is important.
With knowledge you can stand on top and make people bow on you. You can even
marry the princess.”
“No!
I want to go and listen to Penglipur Lela’s story! Yop! This is my order! You
have to obey me!” shout Megat Damai with a whim.
“Yes,
Megat Damai. This humble slave will follow your order.”
“Good.”
And I take his hand to walk with him.
While
he is happily walking, without noticing it, I look at him with hatred. For this
child, what he just order me before is just a simple whim, but for me it is an
utterly disgrace. For these 5 years I have been with him, I have seen our
greatly differences that only make me more ashamed of myself. Since he was
born, he is only surrounded by people who like him, while I always hide from
people eyes with fear because of my birth status. He also lives in lavishly and
comfortably whiles I live by trying all my best to scrape whatever I have as a
slave. But the most horrible thing that happens to me is to taking care of this
rich boy who has the same father as me. Each moment that I have with him is
only miserable.
And
he turned his back to look at me “Yop?” and I smile sincerely to him and said
“Yes, what is it?”
“No,
I just wonder why you silent.”
“Oh,
I just thinking of something else.”
“Alright.”
And we continue to walk.
Although
I have all this swell hatred, I can’t against it, and all I can do is just
acting and watching it with jealousy.
…………………………………………………………………………………………………
We
arrived at the home of Penglipur Lela, where many children are sitting outside
the wooden house that has large stage area for the audience. Megat Damai then
run “I’m going then!” and sit very front to the stage.
And
I walk behind the house to meet Penglipur Lela.
“Sir
Penglipur Lela?” ask me while entering the house. I heard very loud coughing
inside the house. “Sir Penglipur Lela!!” I rushed to see him. He is lying on
his bed, wheezing and coughing.
“You
look very bad.” And I touch his forehead “You’re having a bad fever.” And I
walked out to cancel the show, but he catches me with his right hand, although
his right hand is gone, replaced with large metal hook.
“Nonsense,
I still can talk,” said him egoistically. “I just need you to help me stand up.
Now help me.”
“But
sir…”
“Do
not disturb my job, child. Now help me.”
Then
I remove the blanket and take a staff and give it to him to hold on to it. “And
one two three, ummph,” Grunt him while I help him stand up because he don’t
have his left leg.
“There,
I’m fine, see?” said him while look at me.
“Yes,”
answer me, while holding him.
“Now
let’s go. The children are waiting.”
And
we enter the stage in front of the house. The children who were waiting for
Penglipur Lela are now cheering for his arrival.
“Penglipur
Lela! Tell us about how you sail outside!”
“No!
Tell us about the water that can be solid!”
And
the children are buzzling more, wanting to hear which story that Penglipur Lela
will tell.
I
then put him on stage. He sitting slowly, trying to sit in the best position.
The
children are getting louder.
“Silence,
you children!” shout Penglipur Lela. His shout is so loud that it really
silences all the children that come.
And
he continues “How dare all of you not hold all your excitement with patient!
Don’t you have any manners?!” I still in wonder how he can shout like he never
sick.
The
children are now scared at him. And then he said, “Say the storyteller who is
late today.”
And
they laugh.
“Now,
I will tell you the story of the destiny. Do any of you know what is destiny?”
“The
road of life that is already determined,” answer the child.
“Excellent,
but do you know the path of destiny?”
“No,
sir.”
“Therefore,
I will tell you this story. Once upon a time, there was two brothers, the older
is Lam and the younger is Lim. Lam has strong build and can push a bull while
Lim is smart and he can do many things with his brain. These brothers are good
to each other. One day, they both fall in love with the same woman, and both
wants to marry her. So they let the woman decide whom she wants to marry, as
this is the best choice for them. The woman chooses to marry with Lam, and Lim
follows the woman decision and let go of her. But as time passes, inside Lim’s
heart, a hatred and jealousy began to form as he seeing his brother and his
wife happily together. Unable to hide his feeling that has been swelling, he
has a choice whether to reclaim his love back and fight with his brother, Lam
or find new love. And then….” And Penglipur Lela then becomes silent.
“What
happen next?” ask the children when he being silent for a while.
“Cough!!
Cough cough cough!!!”
“Penglipur
Lela!!” shout the children as they seeing him suddenly coughing so hard.
And
I run to stage and tell these children “The show is over! Go back home!” and I
carry Penglipur Lela to bring him back inside.
“Yop!”
shout Megat Damai “Let me help too!!”
“No
Megat Damai, I can handle this, just go back home or your father will be-“
“Let
me help!! This is an order!!!”
“…”
I hold my though to help Penglipur Lela “Yes, Megat Damai.”
And
we carried Penglipur Lela to his bed.
“You
take care of Penglipur Lela, I will call the healer.”
“Alright.”
I
run with all my might to the healer house. “Healer!! Penglipur Lela is sick!!
Please help!!!”
……………………………………………………………………………………………
….
“His
condition is stable now,” said the healer, while checking Penglipur Lela’s
pulse.
Penglipur
Lela now sleeps on his bed. His face looks better than before, and he’s not
coughing anymore.
Finally
I can take a breath “Thank you sir healer.”
“Just
don’t forget to let him drink this herb after he wakes up and for another three
days.”
“Yes.”
“Well
then, I have to go now.” And he cleans up his things, ready to go out.
I
open the door for the healer.
“My
it’s already late,” said the healer “You better bring your young master back
home quickly, or you will be punished.”
“I
know.” And he walks away.
I
go to see Penglipur Lela sleep on his bed and seeing Megat Damai broth the herb
for Penglipur Lela.
“That’s
enough Megat Damai, let’s go now.”
“But…”
“Penglipur
Lela is sleeping. If you keep on staying here you will wake him up.”
“Alright.”
And
we go back to Temenggung Gelor’s house to send Megat Damai back home.
“There
you are, Megat Damai!” shout Megat Damai’s mother, worrying her only son. “Why
did you ditch your class?! And worse, you’re late!!”
“Mother,
I went to help Penglipur Lela.”
“You
help a poor old man? My, you’re such a kind child.” And she hugs him happily.
“Yop,”
said Temenggung Gelor “You were with him all along?”
Without
making any face, I reply, “Yes, Temenggung Gelor.”
“I
see.” And Temenggung Gelor look at his wife and son “Both of you, it’s already
late, go inside.”
And
they go inside, but Megat Damai looks at me worriedly. I didn’t look at him
back.
“Yop,”
says Temenggung Gelor while holding a large stick. And I kneel at him while
showing my back.
“Why
didn’t you tell Megat Damai not to ditch his study?”
“Because
he orders me not to.”
WHACK!
A hit from Temenggung Gelor’s stick hit my back. I can feel a swell on my back.
“And
why is Megat Damai coming home late?”
“Because
Penglipur Lela is sick, and he-“
Whack!!
He gives me another strike.
“Since
he is sick, why does Megat Damai has to stay there? The one who should taking
care of Penglipur Lela is you!”
And
he gives two more hit. This time I can feel blood coming out of my back.
“I
have given you the task to take care of that old Penglipur Lara, so why are you
trying to drag Megat Damai in taking care of him?! He has to study to inherit
my position as a Temenggung, you foolish slave!!!”
And
he gives me more hit from his stick until I fall down.
Finally,
he stops. “Now go back to that Temenggung’s house and take care of him and
don’t come to this house anymore.” And he enters his house back without even
look at me.
I
stand up while grunts as I stand up with all my might. My back is in pain.
Then, I walk back to Penglipur Lela’s house by myself.
Why?
Why am I being treated like this? I already told him not to come, why I’m the
one whose being hit? I hate that spoiled rich kid the most. He always acts like
he’s the good person and never punished for anything. Whatever bad happens, it
will be me who is being hit. That Temenggung Gelor is just using me as the
replacement to punish Megat Damai, and I really hate it when I know Megat Damai
is look at me at another place while being punished. He must be thinking that I
must be deserved this.
And
I keep on thinking how bad these nobles are until I reach Penglipur Lela’s
home.
“I’m
back, Penglipur Lela.” But Penglipur Lela is still asleep on his bed. I walk a
bit, and I hit something at my feet.
It
is soap, bandage and new clothes. I look back at Penglipur Lela, but he still
on his bed.
“Thank
you…” whisper me to Penglipur Lela and I take these to clean and bandage
myself.
………………………………………………………………………………………………..
It
hurts! Though me as I clean myself on river. My back is sting so much, but I
have to clean it with soap or it will infect. After I cleaned myself, I wrapped
my back with bandage and wear the new clothes.
I
don’t feel pain much, but it itches. Still, this is already good enough for a
slave like me to be able to use bandage. Normally slaves just wash this injury
by river, and just let it be as they don’t have anything to treat themselves.
I
walk back to Penglipur Lela’s house but the itch on my back has gone, because
it has been replaced with pain that stronger than Temenggung Gelor’s hit. The
blood rushed to my head, seeing the sight that I hate the most right now
appeared in my eyes.
“Yop,”
said Megat Damai while waiting in front of Penglipur Lela’s house. He looks
like he’s carrying something, but I can’t hear his other words as all I can
feel is the hatred that I have.
“Do
you hear me, Yop?” ask Megat Damai as he realise I didn’t listen to him.
“Oh,
I hear you.”
“Then,
Yop-“
Then
I remember that Penglipur Lela is still sleeping inside, and I take this chance
“Megat Damai, please come in. I need to do something.”
“Then,
I’ll be waiting for you.”
“Alright.”
And I walk outside. Megat Damai now has entered the house. I walk around the
house to take something.
After
I take it, just a few steps away from the main door, Penglipur Lela is now
standing in front the house.
“Oh,
Penglipur Lela, you have-“
“We
need to talk,” said Penglipur Lela, not allowing me to finish my sentence.
“Alright.”
And we walk a few miles away from the house. And then we sit on the rock where
nobody can hear us.
“Now
give it to me,” said Penglipur Lela as he gives his left hand to me.
“Give
you what?” ask me while I look at him.
“You
think I didn’t know? You took the knife from my house right after you know I’m
sleeping. Now give it back.”
“….”
“I
know how much you hate Megat Damai, but killing him won’t solve anything.”
“You
don’t understand…”
“I
do understand, child.”
“No
you’re not!” I stand up in front of him to show how serious I am. “You never be
the child of mistress and have live as a slave and have to take care of the
person you hate the most!”
“Yes,
I never understand about that!”
“Then-“
“But
I know what happened after I made that choice! Can’t you see the consequence of
it?!!”
I
look at his whole body. I know he don’t have his right hand and his left leg,
so I said to him “So what?”
“Of
course you don’t care once you follow your anger, but you have to know that
everyone is born to have destiny in their life. Some of us might born with
nothing and some are born with everything, but when we live, the choice that we
made create our path for the destiny.”
“Choice?
What choice do I, a slave, have in the future?”
“I
don’t know.”
“Hah!
See? Even you don’t know.”
“But
do not underestimate what god has given, because he knows more than us. You
have to remember, this place is not the whole world.”
“…”
Somehow those words hold me, although I don’t really understand what he meant.
I can feel the rational in my head, but my ego and anger still continues “(Tsk),
I shouldn’t have taken the knife from your house…” And I give it back to him. I
should have taken something else before.
“Even
if you take something else, I will stop you.” Answer Penglipur Lela, it’s like
he knows what I am thinking.
“…”
I didn’t look at him, because I bear my grudge at him.
“Now
let’s go back and sleep.”
I
don’t want to answer him. He is such an annoyance. I hate him.
………………………………………………………………………………………………….
“You’re
late!!” shout Megat Damai inside the house.
“Yeah,”
I just answer him without look at him. Penglipur Lela then walks by himself to
his bed.
“Now
Yop, take off your clothes!” shout Megat Damai while opening something.
“What?
Why?”
“I’m
going to put this ointment at your back! This is the medicine from the eastern
ship, I heard that it’s very effective!”
“….”
I can’t believe him. He comes this way here just to treat my back with such
expensive medicine?
“Now
take off your clothes!!” I wish to refuse him, but knowing his stubbornness, I
take off my clothes and show my back at him. He then put the ointment at my
back.
“Does
it sting?” ask Megat Damai, worrying I didn’t react like I’m in pain when he
puts it.
“No…”
Actually, it is sting. But rather than that, the pain in my heart that hurts
whenever I see him is gone. I wish he didn’t treat me like this, and then I can
stab him without any other feeling.
“Done!
Now it’s time for bandage!” And he bring out the new bandages.
“There’s
no need Megat-“
“I
said let me do it!!” So I let him bandages my body. At first, he wraps it
around my back, and it loosen up, and then he tries again and again. I wish to
say something, but he must insist that he wants to do it, so I just let him be.
“Finish!!”
said him after his 10th tries. “Well, how do you feel?”
“Better,
Megat Damai.” It’s the truth. This time he finally did it better.
“(Giggles),
you’re welcome.” I can’t help but smile at him. He is a kind child.
“And
also, Yop.” He comes closer to me. His cheering face turned to sad. “I’m sorry.
It’s because of me that you got hit badly by father.”
“Yes
it is,” said me.
“Therefore,
I won’t come to meet you again. But can I ask you something?” this is
surprising, this is the first time he ask me. Usually he always orders me
around.
Listening
him ask me like this, I finally give in “Sure, what is it?”
“Can
I sleep with you tonight?”
“Wha?
But this house is not comfortable like your house.“
“I
know, but it doesn’t matter. I want to spend my time with you, even for
tonight.”
“But
if Temenggung Gelor realise you’re not at home-“
“Then
I will wake him up long before the dawn coming,” said Penglipur Lela. It seems
he heard our conversation from the beginning.
“I
will rearrange the bed so that all of us can sleep together.”
“Penglipur
Lela…”
“Now,
now, let’s do this and sleep at once!”
And
we pushed the bed away and lay a large blanket on the floor. I sleep in the
middle while Megat Damai is at my left and Penglipur at my right.
“This
is so fun!” said Megat Damai happily. I can’t understand why this is fun.
Penglipur
Lela is already asleep. After a while, Megat Damai is also asleep. I still
can’t understand why he can sleep on hard floor, but not long after that, I
felt sleepy, and I fall asleep comfortably.
…………………………………………………………………………………………………
After
I woke up, Megat Damai is not be seen anywhere. Then that means he have gone
home while ago.
Me
and Penglipur Lela then rearrange the bed and clean up ourselves at the river.
Right
when almost arrive at the house “Sir Penglipur Lela!” a man is waiting in front
of the house.
“What
is it?” ask Penglipur Lela.
“There’s
an unknown foreign ship that come today. The people inside are speaking in a
language that we never heard, please help us!”
“I
see.” It looks like Penglipur Lela has a job. Then I have to stay in the house…
“Yop,
come with me.”
“Eh?
Why?”
“Look
at me.” And he waves his right hook and his left empty leg. “I need help.”
…………………………………………………………………………………………….
At
the dock, the market is buzzling as usual. The foreign people from many
countries are actively making trades and selling their merchandise, except
these foreigners from unknown ship who are having trouble in communicating with
the locals.
“Drats…”
said the local merchants, scratching his head “I can’t understand anything…”
“##@@$$%%...”
The foreigners are also making the hard face trying to talk. His blood on his
face can be seen clearly as these people have very pale face.
“He
doesn’t speak Chinese or Indian, I don’t know what language he is speaking…”
“English,”
said Penglipur Lela, arrived at the scene. “It has been a long time since I
hadn’t heard this language.”
“English…”
Hearing those words, I began to realise “then, these men…”
“Yes,
they are the people who went to the ‘new land’ and meet the people who have red
skin. And the leader of this ship must be Sir Columbus.”
One
of the foreigners comes near Penglipur Lela. It seems he’s the leader as his
clothes are different than the others, and his face is paler than his other
men. But there are also his men that are in different colour.
And
they talk to each other with the language that I never heard before. But I look
at the unknown ship that I have never seen. The crafty work that I have never
seen at the outer ship, making me wonders what the outside world would look
like.
“Yop!”
shout Penglipur Lela “Come here, I need your help!”
“Yes?”
“Please
escort these men around this place.”
“Anywhere?”
“Yup.”
“But
why?”
“Because
these men want to see this place and record their travels about this place.
They are planning to create a world map.”
“World
map?” I wonder how the whole world would look like.
Realising
my though, Penglipur Lela ask the man something. He then brings out a whole
large piece of rolled paper. The local merchant brings out the table, and they
spread the paper to see the contents.
“This
is our country,” said Penglipur Lela while pointing at a very tiny speck of the
drawing.
“What!!
So small!!!” shout me as I seeing it.
“It
is. And this world map is still incomplete yet. They are trying to travel
further more to the other side of the earth.”
“No
way…” said me as I astonish with this finding. I can’t believe the world that I
am living is so large.
“Also,
in the middle of this world, is the land that full of sand, and at this upper
part is a very cold land that the water can turn into ice,” said Penglipur Lela
while pointing at the map with his hook.
“Wow…”
I still can’t believe what I have heard. “I wish I could go to see all of
this…”
“Are you interested, young man?” ask Sir
Columbus to me.
“Eh?”
I was surprised when he suddenly comes at me asking the question.
“He’s
asking whether you’re interested about this world map.”
“Yes
I do, sir.”
“Then do you want to travel with us?”
“He
asks you if you want to travel with them.”
“What!!”
I can’t believe what I have heard! I want to go!! “But I’m an owned slave, I
can’t go without my master’s permission.”
And
Penglipur Lela talks to the man. He then says something that makes him
surprised.
“Yop,”
say Penglipur Lela to me.
“Yes?”
“Let’s
go to Temenggung Gelor’s house. Sir Columbus wants to buy you.”
……………………………………………………………………………………………….
I
sit a few miles away from Temenggung Gelor’s house, as I am not allowed to come
near the house. Inside the house, Sir Columbus together with Penglipur Lela are
now talking to Temenggung Gelor about buying me. Even I still can’t believe
what I have heard.
But I can imagine what
Megat Damai is doing right now. He must be spying those people right now.
Darn
it, I wish to know what happened inside too.
Long
after that, Penglipur Lela and Sir Columbus comes out from the house. I walk toward
them, wishing to know what has happened.
“Yop,” say Sir Columbus with a smile. He
then give me a hand “Nice to meet you,
boy.”
“…”
I don’t know what to do but Penglipur Lela said to me, “Give him a handshake,
child.” And I give him a handshake. He smiles more as I do it.
And
then we walk back to the dock.
As
we walk, “Penglipur Lela, what happened inside the Temenggung Gelor’s house?”
“When
Temenggung Gelor heard about it, he against it, saying you’re too young and
incompetent to go sailing. But when he wants to buy you with 10 pieces of gold,
he say nothing much.”
“Then…”
“You
will go with them, child.”
My
goodness, this is very unbelievable… I can’t believe I will sail to the other
side of the earth. Then, I will witness by myself everything that Penglipur
Lela has told me before. It’s like dream that come true.
But
then, those people suddenly say something to each other. And then Sir Columbus
talks to Penglipur Lela. He then surprised, but he takes a deep breath and
tells me, “The monsoon is coming sooner than expected, they have to sail soon
or they have to wait another year.”
“Then
I ….”
“You
have to sail with them this evening.”
…………………………………………………………………………………………………..
“Is
this the all the items you have?” ask Penglipur Lela while he rummaging his
house.
“Yes
Penglipur Lela,” answer me while wrapping my whole things with blanket.
“….”
After a moment of silence, Penglipur Lela then spoke, “I can’t believe you will
go so soon…”
“Me
too… it’s so sudden…”
And
both of us being silent.
“At
first, I don’t understand the thing about destiny you’re talking about before…
but now, maybe I have understood it a little.”
Penglipur
Lela smiles. “The more you live, the more you understand it.”
“Penglipur
Lela.”
“Yes?”
“Thank
you.”
“You’re
welcome.”
…………………………………………………………………………………………………
“You
don’t want to see him?” ask Penglipur Lela to me, as I have ready to go now,
all that left is just entering the ship.
“No,
I don’t think so.”
“That’s
too bad. He will be sad, you know.”
I
know what he means, but I don’t think I can look back at him, after all I have
been always bear grudge on him and once try to kill him before.
“YOP!!!”
shout Megat Damai with his might. “WAIT!!!!!” and he also run with his might.
“Megat
Damai…” I am very surprised with his appearance. He hugs me tightly and crying
so hard.
“Don’t
do that, people are seeing…” My face is getting red as he still not letting me
go.
“You
will come back, right?” ask Megat Damai while sobbing. “I heard that it takes
decades to travel outside, you will come back someday, right?”
“Megat
Damai…”
“Please
come back… You’re my precious brother…” Hearing that, tears almost come to my
eyes. But my ego holds the tears. He might not know that we are brothers, but
for all this time, he must have loved me as a brother.
“Yes,
Megat Damai, you are my precious brother too. When I come back, I want to be on
the same level as you, and tell a lot of story of the other world and leave a
legacy to this homeland.”
“Then
it’s a promise.” And he let me go.
“Yup,
promise.” And I wave at him and enter the ship. He waves me back as hard as he
can.
“Is that your brother?” ask Sir Columbus
as he looks at Megat Damai.
“Yes
he is, sire.”
And
the ship set sail, to the new journey for my own destiny.
………………………………………………………………………………………………….
“Captain,
captain,” say the young boy who has black skin.
“Mhmm?”
answer the captain. He still sleeps on his hammock.
“We
have repaired the compass of the ship, please come now.”
“Oh,
right.” And he takes a very large piece of paper and then he measure the map
with a great accuracy. And then he looks at the compass.
“We
are now at 81 North and 123 East, so we will see the land in midday, keep
sailing, no need to change our course.”
“That’s
amazing, I still can’t believe how adeptly you are in read this new map,” say
the big man who has red hair.
“Of
course, because I’m the one who made it.”
“Still,
to think you dare to prove the people that there are exist people who live in
the North pole,” say the young white man sitting while writing.
“And
more…” The dark skin man looks at the kitchen.
“Dinner
is served, everyone,” say the beautiful young woman wearing her beautiful tribe
clothes.
“You
married a Red Indian girl. You’re a really unexpected man, captain…”
“That’s
life men,” He stands up “You never know your destiny.” And he kissed his wife’s
cheek. “Soon, all of you will come to my homeland, and I can show you
everything that I was once told you.”
“But
you were once treated badly as a slave there, right?” ask the man with curly
black hair “So why do you come back here again?”
“Because
I promise to my brother, that I will come back.”
finally finish reading this short story version...
ReplyDeletestill as amazing as the thumbnail you posted...
one small comment on the writing...when you use "answer me.." in some sentences..especially when yop was replying to Penglipur Lela. (Disclaimer!)..I am not that good in grammar that much though. however, I think the use of word "I" is more accurate when writing using a first person tone
example...
1)Megat and I will see penglipur lela (...often people mistake using me and Megat)
so maybe in the line were Yop was replying Penglipur lela you use "answer me"..
I would recommend just use a simple "...I replied..."
keep it up Mar :)
oh, when you said that, i just realize it. thank you for correcting my grammar, i'm so happy you willingly to read the short story version ;w;
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